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글제목	who is my favorite superhero?

작성자	정석호 ()

전자우편	jshjhj@dreamwiz.com

글내용	My father is favorite superhero to me. He was born in little village, young yang So he couldn't take a high-quality education. But my grand father had a strong educational eagerness about a child. Then my father wen to high school in deagu. At first, my father 's friends were much better than father, but since father felt about that , he tried very hard to overtake his friends. Finally, he went to Young Nam university , and his major was electricity. By the way when he was in deagu , he was the head of family because he lived with his younger sister and brothers, not with parants. Despite of this situation, he got A score in his university life. And then he enterd a company, LG electronic. During his company life, he always try very hard. So he went through IMF without trouble and promoted fastly. And when he was mid of fourty, he got the MBA(master of buisness adiministration) During the two year's of his MBA studying, he was working in weekday and studying in weekend. Nowadays he go well in his field owing to MBA and working hard.

작성일자	2013-03-15 오후 2:55:59

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Mina	My father is favorite superhero to me. Correct >> My father is my favorite superhero. He was born in little village, Young Yang. Correct So he couldn't get high-quality education. Correct But my grand father had a strong educational eagerness about a child. Correct >> But my grandfather is strongly eager about education for his child. Then my father went to deagu, big city in korea, for studying. Correct >>Then my father went to Deagu, a big city in Korea for studying. At first my father's friends were much better than my father, so since my father knew his shortage, he tried very hard to overtake his friends. Correct >> At first, my father’s friends were better than him, since my father know about his shortcoming; he tried hard to be better than his friends. By studying hard, finally, he could enter into Young-Nam university and was major in electricity. Correct >> By studying hard, he finally could enter Young-Nam University and majored in electricity. By the way, when he was in deagu, he was the head of family because he lived with his younger sister and brothers without their parents. Correct Moreover, Despite of this situation, he all got A score in his university life. Correct >> However, despite of this situation he all got A score in his university life. Owing to his grade, he enterd into LG electronic as soon as he graduated. Correct >> Owing to his grade, he entered LG Electronics as soon as he graduates. And during his company life, he tries hard to work and survive. Correct So he went through I.M.F, without trouble. Correct The biggest reason I respect my father is written to fallowing sentence. Correct >> The biggest reason I respect my father is written in the following sentences. When he was mid-fourty, he got the M.B.A (mater of business administration). Correct >> When he was mi-forty, he got the MBA (Masters of Business Adminstration). During two year's of his M.B.A studying, he was working in weekday and studying in weekend. Correct >>For two years of his MBA, he was working on weekdays and studying on weekends. Nowadays, he is famous for his wide knowledge and trying hard in his field. Correct >> Nowadays, he is famous for his knowledge and hard work in his field. In conclusion, I respect my father sincerely. Correct But, at the same time, I’m so sorry about his very hard life. Correct So I always try to be a good son in mind and in action since I can do. Correct >> So I always try to be a good son since I can do it.
2013-03-18
오전 9:06:41