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Teacher, I have a one minute speech test at school and I wish youcan help me correct the mistakes in the speech I made down here. It's talking about the talent I have. I need the reply as fast as you can.Thank you very much^^
: Each people has lots of things they are good at. These things can be called as ones talents. The talent I have is catching. It was easy for me to catch flying objects from young. Last time our teacher gave out us chocolates. I left mine on my friends seat which was way at the back. I told her to throw it before the teacher looks back. However she throwed it kind of hard. I thought myslef I could not catch it. But when I looked at my hand the chocolate was there. The people around me had a suprised face and I knew I catched it. These situations were common and I was one of the good catchers in girls in class. However catching is not the only talent I have and I want to try developing other talents that would be usable for me.
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2012-11-08 ¿ÀÀü 7:35:49
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Mia Good luck Eunice ^^


Corrections:


I have a 1 minute speech test at school.
Correct: I have a one-minute speech at school.

So I wish you can correct the mistakes in the speech.
Correct: I wish you can correct the mistakes in the speech.

I wish I could get the reply as fast as you can. Thank you very much^^
Correct: I hope you reply as fast as you can. Thank you very much^^


Speech

Each people has lots of things they are good at.
Correct: Each person has a lot of things that they are good at.

These things can be called as ones talents.
Correct: These things are what we call talents.

Correct: The talent I have is catching.

Before our teacher gave out chocolates in class. I left my chocolote on my friend desk, way at the back.
Correct: Before our teacher gave out chocolates in class, I left my chocolate on my friend¡¯s desk, who was sitting at the back.

Correct: I told her to throw it before the teacher looks back.

However she throwed it too hard. I thought I was unable to catch it.
Correct: Unfortunately, she threw it hard I thought I would not be able to catch it.

But when I looked at my hand the chocolote was there.
Correct: Yet when I looked at my habd, the chocolate was there.

The people around me had a suprised face, and I knew that I caught the chocolote.
Correct: The people around me were surprised to see that I incredibly caught the chocolate.

This kind of situation is common and I am also one of the the good catchers in girls in class.
Correct: This kind of situation is common and I am also one of the good catchers among the girls in class.

However catching is not the only talent I have and I wish I can develop other talents that would be usable for me.
Correct: However catching is not the only talent I have and I wish I could develop other talents that would be useful for me.

2012-11-08
¿ÀÀü 11:52:16