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글제목	Today is hot!

작성자	김동영 ()

전자우편	qkek329@nate.com

글내용	Today was hot day. because I palyed badminton with my cousin. He was good at badminton. But I was better than my cousin. So I was winner. I was so happy!!. It is really nice! I was so tired, so I want to sleep now. But I am writing this diary, So I can't sleep now. It's too bad. But I will soon write this diary. I am happy about that. It's really nice. Oh god! haha! Tomorrow, I will get english class at the morning. So It's time to sleep~ Good night Haycee~

작성일자	2012-07-24 오전 1:15:11

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Haycee	Kindly check the corrections I made on your sentences: Today was hot day. because I palyed badminton with my cousin. -It was a hot day today. I played badminton with my cousin. He was good at badminton. But I was better than my cousin. So I was winner. -He is good in badminton But I was better than my cousin that's why I won. I was so happy!!. It is really nice! -correct I was so tired, so I want to sleep now. -I am so tired so I will sleep now. But I am writing this diary, So I can't sleep now. -But I am writing on my diary so I can't sleep yet. It's too bad. But I will soon write this diary. I am happy about that. -It's too bad. But I will write on my diary soon. I am happy about it. It's really nice. Oh god! haha! Tomorrow, I will get english class at the morning. -I will have an English class tomorrow morning. So It's time to sleep~ Good night Haycee~ -correct
2012-07-24
오후 7:44:41